Hi here is my 2nd elevator pitch for this class
https://youtu.be/ImeouX4CES4
The main thing that stood out to me was that everyone said I needed to not read off of a script so this time I made sure it was way more off the cuff and I truly did not read anything. I got also how I shouldn't change my audiences so I tried to keep it the same throughout the whole speech. Nothing that anyone said was funny or absurd and I did take all of it to the heart to change and make my pitch better. So, therefore, like I said above I did not read anything off a script or a phone and I tried to keep my audience the same throughout. Please let me know if y'all think there is anything I should change or do differently any and all feedback is welcome. Thanks!
Hi Rebeca,
ReplyDeleteI think you did a great job on your elevator pitch. I saw a lot of improvement from our last pitch. Great job at not reading from a script. A suggestion that I would give would be to not say your name, major and school in the middle of your pitch. That stuff is not as important as the information about the product. I also think a stat (such as how many people wear glasses) would help your pitch. Overall though, I think you did a great job!
Hey Rebeca,
ReplyDeleteYour eye contact and speech patterns were solid in this - overall, clean presentation. A few notes: you should run a demo for the audience and project your voice more. Keep it up!!!